Jul 14 2015

….The stranger!

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Good Morning Y6- Take a look at this mysterious picture. What could be going on?
Write me a short description this morning and post it below.. Remember PUNCTUATION and important SENTENCE TYPES!
I can’t wait to read them!!


19 responses so far

19 Responses to “….The stranger!”

  1.   Amberon 14 Jul 2015 at 9:39 am

    “quiet were being watched” whispered Sally,as she and Ned peered up the dilapidated house they saw a dark pair of eyes staring through the window. If they were told it was an isolated building, if they knew it was old, if they knew it was haunted, then they wouldn’t have gone there! Sally said”what’s happening”. As a gust of wing came the dark figure disappeared blue dust sprinkled down from the window. When they thought it was all over they heard a voice say”over here I’m coming for you”. Some people would run away;others just freeze on the spot. I didnt know what to do


  2.   year6on 14 Jul 2015 at 9:42 am

    There are two people called Sally and Ned, they are saying “Quiet were being watched!”But then they saw a little girl with black hair a red dress and grey skin.They could see her slowly tapping on the window.Then they went inside of the house, but then the girl came up to Ned and draged him across the dilapidated wooden floor and crashed into a wall.But then Sally screamed as she was being ripped apart.
    The end


  3.   Tyler loftson 14 Jul 2015 at 9:42 am

    The creepy maned house is dark gray and creppy it stood alone in a icealated grave yard


  4.   Coryon 14 Jul 2015 at 9:44 am

    someone throw a brick at the window it was stood for decades but until now someone was in the window the person how throw the brick stud just like a stachyou. As ned and sall walk to the man but and the man was dead.


  5.   Melissa.Non 14 Jul 2015 at 9:46 am

    Quiet-we’re being watched breathed,Sally as she and Ned nervously peered up the dilapidated manor,suddenly Sally smeared at there isolated house.She froze for a second…
    “Ned I think there is someone in ower house” said Sally
    That is nonsense there is nobody OW never mind said Ned suspishishly.Sally stood silent for a moment then awalk from the stillness .How did the person get in ? Who is the person? What does the person want?


  6.   Ami Won 14 Jul 2015 at 9:46 am

    ” Quiet – we’re being watched!” Breathed Sally; as she and Ned nervously peered up at the dilapidated Manor House. They walked a bit closer to the Manor House and peered in the window and they saw a black figure sat down their house was gloomy. But the house was isolated because it was lonely.


  7.   Lauraon 14 Jul 2015 at 9:46 am

    Quite we’re being watched breathed Sally.
    No we are not there’s no one there (confused) said Ned he began to look up the tall impeccable building.
    what are you looking at (looking with him) said Sally
    You said there was someone watching us (getting cautious with Sally)

    Yeah there is on the left side of the building (looking really confused)
    Well why didn’t you say that Then Sally (getting angry you with her) said Ned
    The left side of the building is falling to pieces said Sally
    Yeah so is the right side said Ned
    Why are you looking on the right side anyway said Sally
    Because I’m checking out the old,gloomy and sides of the building said Ned
    Well look on the left side of the building there is the person said Sally
    Ok said Ned


  8.   year6on 14 Jul 2015 at 9:47 am

    Detail Description.

    Whilst Sally and Ned were playing on the street , Sally saw something in the corner of her eye . ” Quite were being watched through the window ! ” breathed Sally ; as she and Ned ( who was her friend ) , looked up at the dilapidated house . Scared and nervous , Ned and Sally carefully tiptoed along the wide concrete path, as they carried on walking further to the house . Shivering , Sally knocked on the door as Ned was to scared . KNOCK, KNOCK, KNOCK banged Sally on the door . SUDDENLY! Ned could hear someone coming . Who was coming ? What are they doing? What do they want ? …


  9.   Bailey Lovelandon 14 Jul 2015 at 9:47 am

    “Quite“Ned and Sally were been watched a dark black shadow was watching them from behind the curtens!What if it was a alien or what if it was a robber or if it was just a shadow!That hose has been isolated for years!“Also empty”Said Sally to Ned.some people would run ; others would just scare….


  10.   Kyleon 14 Jul 2015 at 9:48 am

    “Quiet we being”watch said Ned be quiet he will hear you in the dilapidated house. Sally was terrified because the prison in the window was steering in ned eyes the undone person has red blood shock eyes. Sally when thought that it was a shadow the top Middle window suddenly the disappeared were did he go


  11.   Lolaon 14 Jul 2015 at 9:48 am

    “QUIET-WERE BEING WATCHED”!!! whisperd Sally while Ned was staring at the dilapidated house Ned herd a noise.”I’m going to through this stone” said Sally
    “NO” shouted Ned
    “Why” Sally mermaid
    “Because I herd a noise” whisperd Ned
    “So what” shouted Sally (throughing the stone at the window.
    “NO” shouted Ned while running trying to find some were to hide…


  12.   year6on 14 Jul 2015 at 9:49 am

    Quiet were being watched!!. Some people were in the dilapidated in the hous watching a film others someone was up in the window, looking and hiding throw the window and curtains and looking as if someone was comming the person next to the window fell down

    I heard a noise I looked up at the window: there was blood splashed at the window then down stairs the light turned off and quickly ran up stairs and (ned and and calmly said to each other it this house haunted or what ) then I woke up and it was a dream… Someone were in there bed and killed them and bough of them are DEAD.

    Probably know one will come to their furmale because know one know that they had died…


  13.   Andyon 14 Jul 2015 at 9:50 am


    Quiet were being watched said Sally “look up there can you see the boy”
    “Yeah”I’m not scared tho”duck he’s in the window they ducked and looked back the boy was gone.They was about to walk into the dilapidated house when they herd a bang Sally stepped back and the door opened they both saw a man lying on the floor sally checked his pulse. The man popped up and grabbed Sally he shot her in the head.Ned ran outside and by the doorwas a spaid he picked it up and waited for the man slowly the dark figure walked towwards the door he stood next to the door and Ned swung the spaid.it went straight into his head after Ned ran home he cryer for adges.


  14.   year6on 14 Jul 2015 at 9:52 am

    “Quiet-we’re being watched!” Sally whispered to Ned; as she and him nervously peered up at the dilapidated Manor House.
    “You are impeccable at finding someone is, wait a second, did you said that someone is watching us? But where, I cant see anyone? Asked Ned.
    “Up there, in the window, look! answered Sally.
    “In window? But this house in isolated, so how can anyone be in there. But I really can see someone in the window.”said Ned. Ned and Sally looked up to the window. Three seconds later everything has gone.
    “I’m happy that just was a dream, a nervous dream.” Said Sally to herself.


  15.   misswoodwardon 14 Jul 2015 at 9:52 am


    “quiet we’re being watched” breathed Sally: as she and Ned peered up at the dilapidated,impeccably old manor house.
    As they got about 5 metres away from the window a car ZOOMED through the window (because he was going at 100 mph). Sally and Ned dived out of the way, Sally got to safety but Ned caught the edge of the car. Gruesomely his foot flew off into the distance, blood splatted all over the place Ned had been killed…


  16.   Stacy hon 14 Jul 2015 at 9:55 am

    The dilapidated manord house is dark and gray.There is an over Pearson in blak.Someones in the mead evel house many it could be a burglar or there peronts.How is the Pearson in the shadow I wonder how it is.


  17.   year6on 14 Jul 2015 at 9:55 am

    Quiet,whispered Sally,I think we are been watched as she was looking up at the dilapidated Manor House. “There is a mysterious dark figure peering through that window”, he is saying something but I can’t make out what it is. The isolated house hadn’t been touched for decades but now it has signs of life. Need was shivering (he didn’t know what to do)”our only choice is to go in” said Sally. Nervous, shaking and shocked – should they enter the house? Sally placed her hand on the rusty door knob and carefully turned it creek! The aincent door slid open as an old creepy picture fell off the brick wall. Need slowly walked up the winding staircase and Sally checked the rooms down stairs she shouted to Ned but he didn’t answer AAAH! Shouted Ned Sally ran out of the house but Ned was locked in…


  18.   Amy's mummyon 14 Jul 2015 at 4:43 pm

    Wow – great stories Year 6 – they are very powerful and get you excited to read more – keep up this great work


  19.   year6on 15 Jul 2015 at 11:50 am


    She and Ned were scared but Sally stared at the dilapidated Manor House they could see a shadow in there house. Then quiltly and slyly walked to the door it was jammed it was really scary.sally said look there’s a key under the new mat so they opened the door there was a person infront of the door but the shadow what was a human got merded because he hunged his self then Sally “said his up there again


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